12.29.2010

Two Old Men

Stand bent over the hood of an old Ford,
both pressing down on the frame as though
lifting their hands would give it away. One man
is smoking a cigarette and there is just enough breeze
that the smoke almost appears to be taken.
The other looks deep into the pick-up's chest,
nodding with thought to the bouncing cigarette.
The Ford is for sale and so important details
must be disclosed in order for a transaction to occur.
The smoker points at what must be the sleeping motor
and asks a question.  It embeds itself into his lip-bitten filter,
tumbles back through the fibers until finally it is exhaled,
drifting off to wherever it is that important questions go.

7 comments:

Dulce said...

It's amazing the way you observe what others do... it's as if i was watching a video... and you place the camcorder where you want me to set my eyes on.

Great piece, Daniel.

D.

Daniel Jay said...

Thank you Dulce! I will do my best to show you what I see.

Harshika said...

ooooooooooo

completely business like :P

lightverse said...

Thanks for the nice comments.

Yours is a blog I definitely want to follow. After reading the last poem, and now, this cinema verite-like piece, I'm hooked and want to read more.

Brian Miller said...

love the description of that last question...and where do they go....

Courtney Walsh said...

Your words are alive... felt like I was watching the two men myself.

emily wierenga said...

brilliant, daniel. i was there, with the men, listening. watching the questions and ashes drift.