maybe at night after everyone has retired
you will sit alone in the living room
squeezing your knees without reason
while leaning forward as if into an apology
all the lights in the house will be turned off
the fridge humming with its unthanked warmth
the stairway wood silent from the absence of pitter patter
and yet the cables of the world are charged with memories
the wireless ones like secrets foaming in your ears
while miles off, far enough to twirl away
the hands of your scratched up wristwatch
someone hangs up a phone, ending a conversation
that occurs through satellites only because
there is no other way
11 comments:
Wow, you can certainly paint a picture with your words.
wireless connection? maybe not. I liked the leaning like an apology. good scene...yet sad.
oh justin i liked this....esp. ...the cables of the world are charged with memories... what a fantastic picture. i could read it all over again.
i also like the description of the silent house and the last line..occurs through satellites only because there is no other way..wow
hope everything is ok in your part of the world
love the title,
well done poem.
Thinking with an opened mouth..you draw a fine picture with words
Richly descriptive. You paint quite the story.
You write so well, this was almost cinematic, I could see it artfully filmed in black and white.
I loved your descriptions...
"all the lights in the house will be turned off
the fridge humming with its unthanked warmth
the stairway wood silent from the absence of pitter patter"
...and the great sense of poignancy it evoked.
Nice writing!
love it the communication through distance because to actually confront each other eye to eye is often to painful...how safe we are with distance...I am as guilty of it as anyone soul can be....thank you..bkm
Very poignant - you say a lot without spelling it out, by the clutched knees, the leaning forward, the remarks about the cables, someone hanging up. I see the scene in my mind, like a film without words, and one knows there is pain in the person's heart. SO well done!
Highly descriptive!
I liked the visual and aural effects. The foaming in the ears, humming of the frig; the clicking of the phone line hanging up. The tinnitus.. no wait thats my noise.
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