9.06.2010

A New Meal, An Old Meal

Would you like me to read it to you?


He was cooking along on his bike
when I saw him – the corked handle
of an old bone-colored fishing pole
in his left hand, a limp fish dangling
from a hook in the other, its scaly shine
searing under the afternoon sun. It was
not until he was startled from his attention
to avoid me that he noticed my hand
opened with hello. He proudly raised
the fish’s tail to his eyebrows while his
knees groaned to the pace of his bike's
chattering gears. Hungry he pedaled on,
cutting the street from corner to corner,
much like my mother would slice apart
my grilled cheese sandwiches, and as the
plastic edge of my rearview swallowed him
l leaned a bit to follow, hoping to have
a little more but saw only crumbs
and an empty plate.


Written for One Shot Wednesday, will you not stop by and give it a shot?

23 comments:

Rinkly Rimes said...

You managed to capture an entrancing moment in time. I hope he fifn't fall of his bike when you were out of sight!

Claudia said...

so you got hungry when you saw him - but not for food but for what you linked with it - with the feelings - maybe of childhood security and being cared for…
i know this as well when i eat something my mother used to cook for me - i wish me back on that kitchen table…and i would lean to follow as well - to make it last as long a possible

senderupwords said...

I too would lean to follow... Great One Shot! Love and Light, Sender

Timoteo said...

This was like Norman Rockwell painting on my mind...made me smile!

Maureen said...

Like Timoteo, my first image while reading this was of a Rockwell painting. You paint a good picture. I like the unexpectedness of the image of slicing grilled cheese sandwiches as a simile for cutting corners.

Brian Miller said...

wonderful write J...you captured a rather magical moment and imbued it with references to dinner...which i have not had yet...so i find myself leaning in as well...hoping for more than crumbs...smiles. nice one shot!

dustus said...

Love your writing style. Got the sense(s) of both nostalgia and being in the moment reading this poem. Vivid descriptions bring the scene to life. Great write!

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers & Artists said...

I agree the words paint Rockwell for me and how appropriate as the seasons change and that free wheeling spirit with the fish must return to four walls and shoes.

Thanks for pitching this at One Shot

Moon Smiles

Neva Flores said...

Such a cool poem.......love this!

Steven Marty Grant said...

This is is very well done, a beautiful surprise for a OSW. Nice work on a fabulous poem.

KB said...

Loving the comparison to the grilled cheese sandwich.

signed...bkm said...

Agreed with all the above...very well done Justin...this is your own style and you capture a moment in time...like a photograph...nice...bkm

Desert Rose said...

that one was different,tasty and fabulous poem J..i look forward to reading you every week..wonderful read..:)

Emmanuel Ibok said...

Wow!...nice.

Beachanny said...

Great metaphor; loved this a lot. The quickness of the moment lost, a slice, a moment like the fish caught. Great! Thanks! Gay

Bill Cook said...

Wonderfully written. Vivid. Memorable. Just the right details and movement. You created a personality in just a few lines. Nice, - Bill

Glynn said...

This is one cool poem. The descriptions of the biker and the driver passing him -- it all comes together.

the wid0w said...

it was a joy to be able to listen to this (exactly as you yourself meant it to be)...
so many times iv cringed when iv heard folk mutilate the flow and rhythm in a poem written by another

the audio circumvents butchery quite nicely.. hats off to your bravery.. i tried adding an audio reading to mine but then i hated what i sounded like so probably wont do it again lol ;-)

Dulce said...

Oh! good Oh MG

Great ending
;)

Eric Alder said...

Interesting the way you tied together the grilled cheese memory with the biking fisher boy. I hope the boy gets to go fishing forever.

Leo said...

very nicely written One Shot.. a moment in time captured nicely..!

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Chris G. said...

Well look at you, all slick and modern with your audio-telling.

Wonderful ending, and a great piece the whole way through. Nostalgic, in its way, with vivid descriptions and fantastic imagery. Beautifully writ!

Pete Marshall said...

this was beautifully written..so much good imagery..and i sensed that you yearned to be him..wanting that life..thanks for sharing..pete